So here’s the deal. You’ve been good little boys and girls so I’m bringing Winger out of retirement to continue his journey. You’re welcome. The last time I wrote about him was September of last year, so you’d do well to reread the first five parts of the story (linked below) to catch up on his journey.
As always, thanks to Rochelle for hosting the get together and you, dear reader, for doing your part.
I’m still accepting comments, criticism, and half drunken rants. Act now before this offer ends.
Copyright John Nixon
Part 1 | Part 2 | Part 3 | Part 4 | Part 5
Prey (The Winger Chronicles: Part 6)
At the edge of the stream they knelt and feigned drinking. Neither had any plans of actually ingesting the glowing, sulfurous water.
Winger eyed his reflection in a small waterfall until the hulking demon appeared over his shoulder. A well placed boot sent the beast stumbling backward and howling in anger. Winger whirled around, leveling his gun in the process.
He squeezed the trigger three times. One shot to the chest, two to the head- just like he’d been taught. The roar of gunfire bounced off the cavern walls in a deafening cacophony that left his ears ringing for hours.
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September 18th, 2013 at 8:56 AM
like it. a lot of action in 100 words 🙂
September 18th, 2013 at 1:38 PM
Thanks. I do enjoy me some action. Glad it came across well.
September 18th, 2013 at 9:15 AM
This story could stand alone too:) nice job
September 18th, 2013 at 1:39 PM
I’ve been trying to make them all that way. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn’t. I’m glad this one hit the mark.
September 18th, 2013 at 10:02 AM
I like the story, but I’m really, really, REALLY curious as to how you got there from this prompt. I thought I was a bit out there last week but nothing like this. The reflection? Anyway, dish on the thought process, please. Just a point of flow–although they’re both correct, “knelt” feels better to me than “kneeled” in your first sentence.
janet
September 18th, 2013 at 1:42 PM
You are correct. It was the reflection that I pulled from the photo. I noticed the person reflected in the glass and imagined the old man to be more interested in the reflection of the person than the stuff on the other side of the glass. From there I just had to take that into the cave. It’s not easy to turn a photo of an old man at a second hand shop into something that’s supposed to take place inside a cave.
You’re probably correct about the “kneeled”, but I have a personal dislike for the word “knelt”. I can explain why, I’ve just never liked it so I rarely use it.
September 18th, 2013 at 1:47 PM
As I said, they’re both correct. Just felt when I read it that “knelt” kept the flow going better. But there are words I dislike, too, so I get that. 🙂 Thanks for explaining your thought process.
janet
September 18th, 2013 at 1:56 PM
I decided to cast my personal dislike aside and change it afterall. You’re right. It just flows better.
September 22nd, 2013 at 6:26 PM
Ok – I was gonna’ ask the same thing. Thanks!
September 18th, 2013 at 5:42 PM
Part Six would easily stand alone if you changed “Liv’s” ears to “his” ears. I agree with kz, good action.
September 20th, 2013 at 10:42 PM
Thanks for the suggestion. You couldn’t be more correct. I’ve made the change.
September 19th, 2013 at 9:39 AM
Great action!
September 20th, 2013 at 10:42 PM
Thanks!
September 19th, 2013 at 10:01 AM
Go Winger go. This is my first sampling fo his adventures.
September 20th, 2013 at 10:43 PM
I hope you enjoyed it. He’ll be joining the fictioneers for at least the next few weeks.
September 19th, 2013 at 12:37 PM
sounds like things are flying uncontrollably
great response to the prompt
September 20th, 2013 at 10:44 PM
I’m glad you enjoyed it.
September 20th, 2013 at 6:43 AM
Dear Adam,
Winger is back! What kept him so long? Who taught him and why? is he still headed where he was going when we last left him? Good job.
Aloha,
Doug
September 20th, 2013 at 10:46 PM
Winger has been telling me about himself for awhile now, I just haven’t had much chance to put his story on paper. The who taught him and why is a long story that I’ll probably touch on at some point, but for now I’m going to leave that part a mystery. He is indeed headed for the same place he was when we last left him. The creature he just killed was the one that followed them into the cave.
September 20th, 2013 at 10:08 PM
Enjoyed your story!
September 20th, 2013 at 10:47 PM
I’m glad! Thanks for reading!
September 21st, 2013 at 6:16 AM
Dear Adam,
While I’ve not gone back to read the prior installments of your Winger Chronicles, I enjoyed the action and concise writing in this piece. It stood alone. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
September 21st, 2013 at 8:30 AM
Thanks for the words of encouragement, Rochelle. Much appreciated.