I was pleasantly surprised to see one of my photos as the prompt for this week, but at the same time that makes this whole thing just a bit harder. I know the real story behind the photo, so coming up with another is a bit difficult, mostly because that is a good memory for me and I don’t want to change it. The photo was taken on my honeymoon–going on seven years ago. But alas, I shall give it my best shot.
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Now that that’s out of the way, on to my tale for the week.
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The marsh had been chosen because it was quiet, secluded. He knew no one would bother them.
His boots thumping against the planks, he approached her, sitting on top of the picnic table under the roof that shaded the end of the pier.
He pulled the flowers from behind his back.
She scowled. “You know I hate roses.”
He leaned in and placed the flowers on the table beside her.
“They’re from Lily.” He planted a soft kiss on her forehead. “She said ‘Mommy need these. Make versry happy.’ Who was I to argue?”
She smiled and laughed. “They’re wonderful.”
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Note: I originally had him killing her. The roses were for another woman, but I just couldn’t go there with a photo from my honeymoon. I wanted to, but I couldn’t. So I guess you could call this a surprise ending in that it is not dark.
Written for Friday Fictioneers.
March 12th, 2014 at 9:11 AM
That was a lovely, romantic story, Adam. I bet your wife was pleased with it. It looks like a beautiful place to visit on a honeymoon. Well done!
March 12th, 2014 at 12:35 PM
Romantic is so not my usual, but I guess occasionally won’t kill me.
March 12th, 2014 at 9:37 AM
lovely story, Adam
March 12th, 2014 at 12:36 PM
Thanks.
March 12th, 2014 at 10:26 AM
Lovely story to go with a terrific picture, you old romantic, you. ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 12:37 PM
I wanted so bad to give it a darker edge. I just couldn’t. It felt wrong to do that.
March 12th, 2014 at 10:57 AM
I am glad you didn’t spoil your connection to the picture. I liked this one.
March 12th, 2014 at 12:37 PM
Glad you enjoyed it.
March 12th, 2014 at 1:19 PM
๐
March 12th, 2014 at 11:15 AM
You have to go to the side of light once in awhile, Adam. Don’t feel bad; we love it. And you did it well.
janet
March 12th, 2014 at 12:40 PM
I feel like I need to bathe in the blood of a thousand sacrifices to get back to my dark ways after that one. Well, maybe not a thousand… maybe two thousand would work better. I’m kidding of course, we all know the real number is closer to three thousand. ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 12:45 PM
Nothing wrong with taking the light side occasionally, and thanks for sharing your honeymoon photo. I hope it’s not spoiled by what the rest of us do with it!
A little concrit – I didn’t like the passive voice in the first sentence. I’d have been more comfortable with you telling us who chose the location and I can’t think of any plot reason not to change it. Just a thought.
March 12th, 2014 at 12:53 PM
To be honest, I was going back and forth between 2 versions of the first sentence. You’re right though. I likely should have gone the other way. I blame the light-hearted take for my lack of better judgment. ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 1:35 PM
You old romantic. I’ll forgive you since it’s a honeymoon photo. Nice story.
March 12th, 2014 at 7:54 PM
Thank you for the forgiveness. It’s appreciated.
March 12th, 2014 at 2:25 PM
that was a surprise ending. and a lovely one! ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 7:54 PM
A surprise ending to me as well. I wasn’t planning to end it this way.
March 12th, 2014 at 2:42 PM
I very much like your happy twist ending ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 7:55 PM
Don’t tell anyone I said this, but I do too.
March 12th, 2014 at 2:43 PM
You know, I thought he was going to kill her when she said she hated roses! lol Earlier today I accidentally wrote 100 words for the prompt from Feb. 28 (it was pretty good too) about an assassin. I thought of your story last week when I wrote it. I’m looking forward to another photo prompt to take in that direction. ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 7:56 PM
I look forward to reading the escapades of your assassin some day.
March 13th, 2014 at 6:54 AM
Perhaps one day… ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 4:22 PM
I’m not usually a fan of romance, but I must be feeling soppy this evening. I liked it.
March 12th, 2014 at 7:58 PM
Neither am I. The only explanation I can come up with is that the government pumped some sort of neurotoxin into the air to make us more docile.
March 12th, 2014 at 4:26 PM
I know what you mean about stories changing the actual memory of a location! Glad you kept your honeymoon as positive as it was and gave a lovely twist at the end. Where was this photo taken? I absolutely love it ๐ the proportions and perspective are just divine, and the little bit of green on the left of the boardwalk adds just the perfect amount of asymmetry.
March 12th, 2014 at 7:59 PM
The photo was taken at the Disney resort in Hilton Head Island, SC. One of my favorite photos for sure.
March 12th, 2014 at 9:15 PM
I would never expect such beauty at a Disney resort! Well I just learned something ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 4:48 PM
I love the story behind the story as well as…the story.
March 12th, 2014 at 8:00 PM
There’s always a story behind every story, isn’t there?
March 12th, 2014 at 5:31 PM
I could really feel in your story you intended to kill her.. but yes I understand your sentiment…
March 12th, 2014 at 8:01 PM
It’s so much easier when the photo isn’t your own. Who knew?
March 12th, 2014 at 6:27 PM
Great story Adam and what a dilemma you faced. I can see the conflict you must have faced, but you handled it very well.
March 12th, 2014 at 8:02 PM
Thank you, kind sir. I wasn’t too sure about this one when I posted it.
March 12th, 2014 at 8:40 PM
I think it worked beautifully better than you first thought.
March 12th, 2014 at 6:41 PM
It might not be your usual style, but it worked. Nice to see a human heart beating amid the darkness. Thanks for a great prompt, too.
March 12th, 2014 at 8:03 PM
If a human heart is all you’re after, I keep a stock of them in my basement… you know, just in case. ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 7:53 PM
Awww…
LOL on your note!
March 12th, 2014 at 8:05 PM
I’m glad I don’t write romance. I much prefer the darkness to this mushy stuff.
March 12th, 2014 at 9:38 PM
The softer side of Adam – I liked that! Nicely done – and thanks for the photo!
March 13th, 2014 at 8:03 AM
I’m really just a big ol’ teddy bear, but I’ll deny it if you tell anyone I said that. ๐
March 12th, 2014 at 9:54 PM
The story did seem a little menacing at first – secludion, no one to bother them, the wife scowling – and there was the little girl making everything right. Nice twist, Adam.
March 13th, 2014 at 8:03 AM
Thanks, Karen.
March 12th, 2014 at 11:35 PM
I was nervous but it ended well. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 12:00 AM
ps. I didn’t want to be repetitive but I am glad with what you did with your honeymoon pic too. It is funny but a few people including myself wrote about romance or relationships without reading this first. Ahhh. The love must have shone through. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 8:05 AM
Yeah, I noticed that too. Quite intriguing.
March 12th, 2014 at 11:47 PM
Well, well,well… Adam is a softy after all. I KNEW IT!! I was shocked when I thought he was stalking out to kill her. Nice job. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 8:06 AM
SHHH. Keep your voice down! Stuff like that could ruin my reputation.
March 13th, 2014 at 2:18 PM
Oops… lips are sealed darlin’. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 1:03 AM
I always enjoy hearing from the photographer on Fictioneers days. I’m glad your accompanying story was happy.
Since there will be no half-drunken rant tonight, I’d like to make a suggestion for this beautiful tale. Instead of “His boots thumping against the planks, he approached her, sitting on top of the picnic table under the roof that shaded the end of the pier.” Consider something with fewer gerunds such as “His boots thumped against the planks as he approached her, sitting . . . ” JMHO. ๐
Cheers!
MG
March 13th, 2014 at 8:08 AM
That’s actually how it was originally, but it didn’t feel right. Something about thumped and approached being together just felt off to me. Thanks for the advice, though. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 2:43 AM
I liked it this way Adam… and oh yes I clicked on your plug too! ๐
~ Indrajit
March 13th, 2014 at 8:09 AM
I liked it this way too. I didn’t think I would, but I do.
March 13th, 2014 at 5:09 AM
Dear Adam,
I’m sending the sweetness baton back to you. I’m glad you didn’t kill anyone and love the story behind the photo. Where did you honeymoon?
shalom,
Rochelle
March 13th, 2014 at 8:12 AM
I just can’t get away from that darn thing!
We honeymooned in Hilton Head Island in South Carolina.
March 13th, 2014 at 6:08 AM
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March 13th, 2014 at 11:39 AM
Hi Adam,
Thanks for the great photo. I liked the ending you chose better and the fact that the source of the flowers made all the difference. Ron
March 13th, 2014 at 10:48 PM
Thanks, Ron.
March 13th, 2014 at 3:24 PM
nice twist at the end. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 10:49 PM
Even surprised myself with this one.
March 13th, 2014 at 3:30 PM
Your wife would be proud. Great picture byw.
March 13th, 2014 at 10:49 PM
Thanks!
March 13th, 2014 at 6:31 PM
We all need a happy ending every once and a while… Thanks.
March 13th, 2014 at 10:50 PM
I suppose you’re right.
March 13th, 2014 at 8:46 PM
This is sweet! Once in a while we all need some sweetness. Great photo, but I’m sorry to say it only brought visions of murder for me. ๐
March 13th, 2014 at 10:51 PM
No reason to be sorry about that. Visions of murder are perfectly fine in my book… in the fictional sense anyway.
March 13th, 2014 at 10:34 PM
This is a beautiful lovely sweet story, very well-written, almost brought a tear to my eye. Who’d you get to write if for you?
March 13th, 2014 at 10:52 PM
Well I thought about getting you to write it, then I realized it would be none of those things. So I did what anyone in my position would have done. I asked my 3 year old what to write.
March 14th, 2014 at 12:26 AM
I loved the, “Make versry happy.” That was very sweet. Yeah, I can see why you might not want this one to be dark. Would your wife ever forgive you? It’s looks like a beautiful and romantic place. It’s a great photo for us to write about.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:37 PM
Thanks, Amy.
March 14th, 2014 at 8:26 AM
You still managed to build the tension, but then let us off the hook — you old softie!
March 14th, 2014 at 10:37 PM
Don’t get used to it. ๐
March 14th, 2014 at 9:44 AM
You big romantic you! Never expected this, proves there is a light side too!
Well done and,as I’ve already mentioned, this is a great picture.
Dee
March 14th, 2014 at 10:38 PM
The best stories are a mix of both light and dark. I’m still trying to learn to blend the two.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:14 AM
Good story! Thank you for the photo! It was fun to write a story about it! ^..^ B
March 14th, 2014 at 10:38 PM
Thanks. Glad you liked the photo.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:42 AM
Romanticism is not dead, very good news! Now sing with Cake and me Adam : I will survive la la la …
๐ Tay.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:40 PM
If you’d hear me sing you’d want to scratch your eardrums out.
March 14th, 2014 at 2:59 PM
I expect, knowing what you usually write, there’s a knife in the middle of those roses. Thanks for providing the photo prompt this week. Nice that it was taken on your honeymoon. It could start a trend: FF photo prompts taken on FriFictioneers’ honeymoons! I would have to supply a photo of Edinburgh castle. ๐
March 14th, 2014 at 10:41 PM
No knife this time around. This one is more real me and less writer me.
March 14th, 2014 at 6:34 PM
sweet love story but i can easily see how you could turn it into something dark and gory. thanks for sharing both photo and story.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:42 PM
Indeed. It could have gone either way.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:20 PM
Adam you killed it! <===see what I did there? ๐
Can you divulge the location captured in the photo? Is there ocean behind the photographer?
March 14th, 2014 at 10:44 PM
This was taken on the inland side of Hilton Head Island, South Carolina. Ocean not directly behind, but close. Just have to cross the fairly narrow island first.
March 14th, 2014 at 10:46 PM
Excellent choice. Beautiful area.
March 14th, 2014 at 11:03 PM
Good story, good back story, too!
Regards
Jim
March 15th, 2014 at 12:23 AM
Lovely story – from your intro I guessed it would end somewhat more happily than usual!
March 15th, 2014 at 12:36 PM
Very sweet !Loved that her opinion changed once she knew who they were from-loved this Adam even though it was not dark and thank you for sharing this photo-such a romantic and precious memory behind it:-)
March 16th, 2014 at 3:03 AM
Adam, good story and good picture. Your wife is a lucky woman and that you didn’t want to ruin the remembrance of your honeymoon with a creepy murder – good for you – You are a romantic! Nan
March 16th, 2014 at 8:01 AM
That’s a lovely story. Takes me back…
Thanks for the pic. (Nice shot, incidentally; love those converging lines.)
March 17th, 2014 at 9:22 AM
Delightfully sweet, Adam, I laughed out aloud at the bit after the story, where you said you originally intended to kill the poor lady! Indeed, its best to keep lovely memories like those of a honeymoon away from murders ๐
March 17th, 2014 at 4:22 PM
Love the surprise happy ending. And thanks for sharing the photo.
March 18th, 2014 at 12:41 PM
Your picture sparked a lot of love stories this week! Not too sappy ๐
March 19th, 2014 at 6:55 AM
Roses from Lily? Nice touch. Glad you listened to your heart and not head. ๐