Good morning, friends. This Friday brings us another 100 word tale inspired by the photo prompt from Madison Woods.
If you’ll notice, the header at the top of the page and my URL have changed. This is because I’ve decided to kick my pen name to the curb. It was time for Brandon to go. I used the name one final time in the list of links so you’d know who I was. From here on out I’ll be using Adam Ickes.
Also, if you haven’t been following the Tales of the Traveler, you really should. *wink wink nudge nudge*
Berry Tester
“My old man says they’re poisonous.”
“Your old man is full of it.”
“No he isn’t.”
“Why don’t we have Abby test them?”
“No way! My mom will kill me if I poison Abby.”
“Well I’m not doing it.”
“Me neither.”
“Billy?”
“Summer camp all week.”
“Clive?”
“At the beach.”
“What about Chuck?”
“That could work.”
“Just pick a couple.”
“What do we say when he asks what they are?”
“Tell him they’re raspberries.”
“Good thinking.”
“Wait. What if he dies?”
“He won’t. He’ll probably just barf.”
“But what if he does?”
“Well, then I guess I get his bike.”
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If you haven’t done so already, check out the stories written by the other Friday Fictioneers- use the link below for a list.
June 29th, 2012 at 6:51 AM
I want his baseball glove….and his bat.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:12 AM
I’m good with that, as long as I get his hockey stick.
June 29th, 2012 at 6:57 AM
i know I shouldn’t but I laughed. I sure hope he doesn’t though. I see you changed the name 🙂 Our stories are on the list!
June 29th, 2012 at 9:13 AM
It’s good to laugh. That’s what I was hoping for. On the plus side, we can raid his stuff and see if he has anything good.
June 29th, 2012 at 8:08 AM
LOL! I love it and the humor peppered throughout. Great job and thanks for giving me a good laugh on a Friday morning. Not a bad way to start the day.
Here’s my story.
http://nwfantasywriter.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneers-penance.html
June 29th, 2012 at 9:15 AM
Glad I could be of service, and I agree- there are few better ways than laughter to start a day on a positive note.
June 29th, 2012 at 8:27 AM
Oops, I chuckled too! The practicalities of childhood. I liked it, Adam.
Ours is linked/here http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/fight-or-flight
June 29th, 2012 at 9:16 AM
Glad you enjoyed it and found the humor in there.
June 29th, 2012 at 8:40 AM
Just like kids… impeccable logic.
Nice one.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:17 AM
I am a creature of logic. It bothers me when I see illogical things happening- odd that I write about illogical things so much now that I think about it.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:15 AM
I like Adam Ickes so much more. At first, I thought that was the pen name.
The story is a fun dialogue to read.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:21 AM
Glad you liked the story.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:15 AM
Ahahaha. Ever practical. The bike’s gotta go to someone. 🙂
June 29th, 2012 at 9:22 AM
Just think of all the other cool stuff he has stashed away. We could make a killing on ebay!
June 29th, 2012 at 1:20 PM
Ahahahahaha. Knocking people off with poisonous berries then selling all their stuff! That’s the way to do it.
Here’s my linky (I managed just a little something): http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/pick-me/
June 29th, 2012 at 9:35 AM
Very entertaining 🙂
June 29th, 2012 at 11:46 AM
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:52 AM
Ha ha. Very funny and so well written. Thanks for stopping by mine
June 29th, 2012 at 11:47 AM
Every now and then the need for humor strikes me, I’m just glad others get my sense of humor. I know quite a few people who wouldn’t understand why this is funny.
June 29th, 2012 at 9:53 AM
Kids will be kids!
June 29th, 2012 at 11:49 AM
They certainly will! Nothing anyone can do to stop that and that’s a good thing, for the most part.
June 29th, 2012 at 10:32 AM
Ah, yes, younger siblings are good for lots of mischief. 😉 Good job, and thanks for the comments on mine.
June 29th, 2012 at 11:49 AM
Mischief is often what children do best. At least it keeps things interesting!
June 29th, 2012 at 11:39 AM
The logic of a child. I love the last line. By the way, nice to meet you Adam!
Mine is here: http://wp.me/p1Wqon-bl
June 29th, 2012 at 11:52 AM
I can see him hoping the berries actually do kill the kid, just so he can have a new bike, though I’m pretty sure the berries aren’t actually poisonous.
June 29th, 2012 at 12:03 PM
I love the dialogue, easy flow and hilarious. The last line threw me. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/fridayfictioneers-seduction/
June 29th, 2012 at 12:50 PM
Glad I could offer up some humor on this wonderful Friday.
June 29th, 2012 at 12:28 PM
Hi Adam,
June 29th, 2012 at 12:31 PM
Hi Adam,
Skillfully written dialog. Good childhood POV. Don’t know if you want suggestions, but I think it would be nice to break up the dialog some with description or thoughts, but, overall, very enjoyable. Ron
June 29th, 2012 at 12:53 PM
Thanks, Ron. Sometimes I go all dialogue because I feel dialogue is one of my weaker points as a writer, so a story of al diagloue helps me work on that. That and the 100 word limit is a killer sometimes. I try to always hit exactly 100, sometimes that doesn’t leave room for everything I’d like to include and I’m forced to bring out the ax and chop down some sentences.
June 29th, 2012 at 12:42 PM
Great take on the prompt. Made me smile.
Loved the way the dialogue flowed throughout.
PS Who gets his playstation?
June 29th, 2012 at 12:54 PM
Thanks, Mike. Playstation is all yours is those other vultures don’t get to it first.
June 29th, 2012 at 12:52 PM
I loved this! So real, so funny. Love your sense of humor! Thanks for sharing this little gem.
June 29th, 2012 at 12:58 PM
Thanks, Jan. Glad I could provide you with a bit of laughter on this clock watching Friday afternoon.
June 29th, 2012 at 3:14 PM
Note to Russell–don’t eat anything Adam offers you! I’m glad you abandoned the pen name. I think you’ll be better off in the long run.
thanks for the nice comment on mine.
http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
June 29th, 2012 at 4:55 PM
Probably won’t matter if you eat what I offer or not. If the poison doesn’t get you, the knife just might.
June 29th, 2012 at 3:24 PM
Very naughty boys. But, I loved the dark humor!
–Jan
June 29th, 2012 at 4:56 PM
I could see a younger me having that exact conversation. Never happened, but I wouldn’t put it past me.
June 29th, 2012 at 3:27 PM
Gee these guys are awful, they ran off a check list for goodness sakes. Then divvied up the poor guy’s things in a worse case scenario. Boys are great that huh? THanks for commenting on mine. Heres the link for the blog hop: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/06/flash-fictioneer-friday-berries-and-pip.html
June 29th, 2012 at 4:57 PM
Things like this make me glad I have a daughter and not a son. Then I realize girls come with a whole different set of problems.
June 29th, 2012 at 4:18 PM
Those two are up to no good.
http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/28/w-m-d/
June 29th, 2012 at 4:58 PM
They’re doing what boys do. Consequences aren’t big on a young boy’s priority list. That leads to a lot of no good.
June 29th, 2012 at 4:59 PM
I remember a similar converstaion by my brothers when we first moved to the country. That was long ago. Thanks forthe memory!
June 29th, 2012 at 7:57 PM
Glad to be able to bring back long lost memories for you.
June 29th, 2012 at 5:28 PM
I loved this peep into the mind of child. There is no concept of the consequences of their actions…and it makes GREAT story fodder! Well played…
~Susan (www.susanwenzel.com)
June 29th, 2012 at 7:58 PM
Thanks! I was a little boy once, I know how the little devils think.
June 29th, 2012 at 6:05 PM
So Chuck’s the big brother? It’s a win/win situation. I’m on the list.
June 29th, 2012 at 8:00 PM
When I wrote it Billy, Clive, and Chuck were part of their circle of friends. Abby was the only sibling mentioned. Chuck just happened to be their only friend still around so the honor fell on him. But looking back at the story, big brother could work too.
June 29th, 2012 at 6:22 PM
Baaahahahaa! They are all heart, aren’t they? 😛 Very nice story – well, very nicely written. 😉 So…did Chuck eat them? Did he live?
Here’s mine for those who may not have read it. http://mahjira.blogspot.com/2012/06/not-here-friday-fictioneer.html
June 29th, 2012 at 8:02 PM
My original thought behind the story was the kid’s dad told him the berries were poisonous so he wouldn’t have to stop and pick any on their way home one day, so even if Chuck did eat the berries, he was likely perfectly fine.
June 29th, 2012 at 8:12 PM
One of my greatest fears is that my children will accidentally kill one another by not taking my advice about poisonous substances seriously. Ok, it wasn’t, but it is now! I’m also scared that they take all of my rubbish advice, given when I want to avoid doing something taxing/boring/involving effort during tired moments, seriously into their formative years. Ah, I’ll book them some therapy now.
Loved it!
http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/friday-fictioneers-29th-june/
June 29th, 2012 at 9:45 PM
I’m going to have the same problem. I make up stuff a lot. I grew up with an “if I don’t know the answer, I’ll just pretend I do” attitude. The sad part is people tend to believe me, even if what I say is way beyond the realm of logic and reason. I guess being a man of few words has its perks.
June 30th, 2012 at 2:20 AM
How cruel yet funny, reminds me how I gave my mum a spicy hot lollie on time and told her it was strawberry flavour, sadly she didn’t buy it.
June 30th, 2012 at 2:15 PM
I’ve never attempted a joke like that myself, but I’ve been tempted a time or two.
June 30th, 2012 at 4:40 AM
Haha…I see good old Russell has some competition in the humor department. I’m trying to think of what I would take from that kid…maybe his IPOD. Thanks for the chuckle. Oh.,..and thks for visiting me.
June 30th, 2012 at 2:22 PM
I don’t know if I’d be much competition. I have my moments, but for the most part I don’t write a lot in the way of humor.
June 30th, 2012 at 4:51 AM
I raised three boys. I remember someone passing off exlax to me as chocolate candy. I think it was my older brother. Fun story, Adam. So tell me, how do you pronounce Ickes?
June 30th, 2012 at 2:34 PM
That wasn’t very nice of your brother – funny, but not nice.
My name is pronounced ICK-iss.
June 30th, 2012 at 10:43 PM
It’s okay….it was soon behind me. Thanks for the pronunciation.
June 30th, 2012 at 10:38 PM
Was that a young Clive Barker? I love that name…Clive. Excellent.
July 1st, 2012 at 9:58 AM
Clive Barker is actually where I got the inspiration for the name, but I don’t think it was him in the story.
July 1st, 2012 at 5:35 AM
I love how this is all just dialogue and yet we absolutely know their ages, their gender and the kind of kids they are. Really great writing.
July 1st, 2012 at 9:59 AM
Thanks! I appreciate the compliment.
July 1st, 2012 at 9:03 AM
Hahahaha, sounds just like a conversation two boys would have. Great dialogue. I loved that it sounded great, and I could tell who said what.
July 1st, 2012 at 10:02 AM
I’ve witnessed many similar conversations during my younger years. I had some interesting friends lol
July 1st, 2012 at 6:47 PM
I totally laughed. There’s a reason the Mikey Likes It commercials were a hit — kids do that!
July 2nd, 2012 at 4:30 PM
Glad I could give you a laugh, Kathy.
July 2nd, 2012 at 10:34 AM
Love, love, love this! The rapid-fire, give-and-take dialogue really puts us in the middle of the conversation. Very practical use of their friends, too! 🙂
July 2nd, 2012 at 4:30 PM
What better way to use your friends than as for test subjects? 🙂
July 2nd, 2012 at 1:52 PM
Children can be so matter of fact can’t they about what’s really important in life – in this case, the bike. You really made me smile 🙂
July 2nd, 2012 at 4:31 PM
Happy to put a smile on your face, Linda. We all know bicycles are more important than even the best friend.
July 3rd, 2012 at 11:26 AM
Isn’t that the truth 🙂
July 11th, 2012 at 9:39 PM
Thanks for reading and following my blog. I enjoyed checking yours out and will follow it as well.
July 12th, 2012 at 4:36 PM
Thank you kindly. I hope you like what you find here.