Sebastian ran to make the boat, carrying his coat despite the chill in the air. Slipping it on while running would have only slowed him down. His heart sank when he rounded the final turn to see the boat pulling away from the dock. If he’d arrived just ten seconds earlier he could have made the jump from the dock to the boat. He slowed to a jog and slipped his coat on, cursing under his breath.
“Late again, greenhorn! Best be lookin’ for a new boat,” someone aboard called out. The boat disappeared into the thick fog that blanketed the bay. He turned to walk away, but stopped when the voice called out again. It wasn’t a jab at him that time, but a plea for help, and it wasn’t just one voice–it was all of them. He looked over his shoulder. The voices died and the fog crept closer.
“Hello?… Guys?”
The fog nipped at the edge of the dock. The boards creaked and groaned. Sebastian backed away as greedy tendrils of mist snaked across the planks toward his feet. His boot sizzled at the mere touch of the unearthly fog.
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This story was written for Sunday Photo Fiction.
March 24th, 2014 at 11:07 PM
Very good. I especially liked the last line. Very visual story.
DJ
March 25th, 2014 at 9:08 PM
Thanks. The last line was actually the first line I wrote.
March 24th, 2014 at 11:24 PM
I liked how you handled the fog – just enough to get my imagination running without doing all the work for me. Nice!
March 25th, 2014 at 9:09 PM
Thanks, Raven. Those are my favorite kinds of stories. Glad I hit the mark for you.
March 25th, 2014 at 3:08 AM
Freaky horror story. Love the way you did it Adam.
March 25th, 2014 at 9:10 PM
Thanks, Al. Loved this prompt. Hopefully I can make this a more regular thing.
March 26th, 2014 at 3:08 AM
I know time is a serious problem
March 25th, 2014 at 9:33 AM
Good and well-written story as usual, Adam. Wow! Your fogs are lethal. I added my story today.
March 25th, 2014 at 9:11 PM
To be fair, a lot of what I write is lethal. I pity the characters in my stories sometimes. They don’t stand a chance in most of the worlds I create for them.
March 25th, 2014 at 10:24 AM
I love the imagery.
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March 25th, 2014 at 9:11 PM
Thanks.
March 25th, 2014 at 12:23 PM
Lucky escape (as long as he starts running now)!
As if acid rain weren’t enough 🙂
March 25th, 2014 at 9:12 PM
Yeah, I bet he isn’t upset about missing the boat anymore.
March 25th, 2014 at 7:59 PM
Great story! I used to like walking in the fog . . .
March 25th, 2014 at 8:34 PM
Thanks. I enjoy generally enjoy fog. Something about it just calms me. The only time I really don’t like it is on rainy nights when I have to drive in it.